Grey Trailer (Advisions/Edits)

Trailer: Grey

            (scene opens to the roof of a long wood shed, with an old pecan tree behind it, and a wood fence behind that. There is the sound of whistling moving plastic pipes and grunting boys.  A low sound of thuds as plastic pipes collide repeatedly. The scene moves behind the shed and you see four boys holding PVC of various lengths, two of them in their late teens, one in his mid-teens and one in his early teen years. They are all panting.)

Boy in his mid-teens: (labored breathing) “Sup’ Enoch, haven’t got any fight left in you?”

Enoch: (deep breath and speech) “You know full well that I have more endurance than (cut off)”

Boy in his elderly teens: (still panting, but interrupts anyway) “Than who, (pant) are you saying that you are (pant) better than us?”

Enoch: (not panting) “Joseph, you clearly cannot take constructive criticism well, I am saying that (cut off)”

Joseph: (pants one last time) “What you’re saying is bull!

Boy in his early teens: (tired voice) “Can we just shut up and fight?”

Joseph: (ticked) “Fine, Mark, we’ll start again.”

Enoch: (annoyed) “Sampson?”

Sampson: (announcing) “Kampf!” (german for fight)

(Scene continues as all four raise their plastic weapons, and start sparring. Mark, who is around 5’, is fighting Joseph, using his size to avoid blows, meanwhile Enoch is fighting Sampson, and pressing the attack. As Sampson rears to dodge a pike to his shoulder, he is put in between Mark and Joseph, Mark had been dual wielding and lost a piece, so he has time to pick it up. They decide to switch partners. Joseph is losing the endurance game  with Enoch, even though it is 90 degrees and Enoch has a camo hoodie on, and neither Sampson nor Mark can use their best features to their advantage, but Mark is still winning.)

Mark: (nuscancing) “Getting tired yet, Sam?”

Sampson: (annoyed) “Shut up and don’t call me Sam.” 

Mark: (nuscancing, in a tiny voice with a smirk) “Just shut up and Fight!”

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